Sample of Chuangyi's translation
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suanzThis is a comparison between saiyuki_manga & Chuangyi's translation for the last chapter. I think it's easier this way to decide on the quality. And one major mistake in Chuangyi's translation is Gato's name. They translated it as Gatei Neneboku!!! It was printed as Nenehoku (Nenehawk in English, I suppose) in the Jap version, but the bozos read it as Neneboku!!! BWAHAHAHAHAHA!!!!
Page 01
[Hakkai] “You’ve forgotten something.” – Forgotten something, Ukoku?
Page 02-04
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Page 05
[Hazel] …Hey, Master… Now I can hear the voice of God in my heart. That flower….and all things that bloom, embracing half a soul— Master… I can finally hear the voice of God calling from inside me….. like that flower… so long as a thing possesses even five tenths of a soul…..
Page 06
[Hazel] They’re so beautiful—…..it must be beautiful…
[Gojyo] “HAZEL--!!!”
Page 07
[Goku] “~~~You bastard….” - You..!!
[Ukoku] “Well then. Have I forgotten anything else?” – will there be anything else?
[Hakkai] “—I wonder…” – I didn’t think so (I think they’re confused and thought it’s still Ukoku speaking. *snorts*)
Page 08
*bang!*
Page 09
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Page 10
[Sanzo] “—It’s a parting gift, you shitty raven.” – You forgot my parting gift, you stinking crow
Page 11
[Ukoku] “….I see. So you were covertly healing him in the midst of the bustle.” –
I see… so you went and healed yourself while I was distracted, did you? *snort 2*
[Hakkai] *slumps down*
[Sanzo] I aimed for his temple….but he dodged it by a hair. – I was aiming for the guy’s temple… but he actually managed to duck it in time…
[Ukoku] “Not bad, ‘Sanzo Ikkou.’” – You’re a real piece of work, Sanzo & Company.
Page 12-14
[Gojyo] "GAH!" – KOFF!!!
[Ukoku] "...I'll be looking forward...to our next 'night.'" – I look forward… to the next ‘nightfall’!
[Hakkai] "Ack!" – UGH!!
[Sanzo] "You bastard...!!!"
*ravens cawing*
*wings beating*
[Goku] “DAMN IT!!!!!”
Page 16
*cicadas buzzing*
Page 17
[Gojyo] “…….those bugs…” – crickets?
[Sanzo] “They’re so damn loud.” – Well I’ll be damned…they’re chirping….
[Goku] “….yeah.”
[Hakkai] “—Oh. You’re alive, Sanzo?” – Eh? You’re still alive, Sanzo?
[Sanzo] “You gotta problem with that?” – yeah, so sue me.
[Goku] “Ahaha.”
[Sanzo or Gojyo?] “What, Goku?” - What’s so funny, Monkey boy?
[Goku] “No, it’s just that—“ – Nah… it’s just that….
Page 18
[Goku] “I’m only starting to shake right now.” - ..my hands have only started to tremble now….
[Hakkai] “Ah—I know exactly what you mean.” – Ah… I know what you mean….
[Gojyo] “…Hey, Sanzo, this is no joke, man. Why do we have to go up against a crazy strong guy like that?” – Maaaaan! You gotta be kiddin’ us, Sanzo!!! Why’d ya have to go make an enemy of that crazy freak of nature anyway…..
[Sanzo] “You guys are the ones who barged in on your own.” – I never asked you idiots to butt into my affairs
[Goku] “But if he’s Sanzo’s enemy, then doesn’t it mean he’s our enemy?” – But any enemy of Sanzo’s an enemy of ours too, right?
[Hakkai] “Unfortunately, yes.” – Sad but true, I’m afraid
Page 19
[Sanzo] “…there you go. So quit complaining, you stupid kappa.” - ..that’s the way it is then. Got a problem with that, Redhead?
[Gojyo] “~~You don’t have a shred of charm, you hack of a supreme mo—OW OW OW OW!!?” – Damn priest! That’s why you’re so not cute at… YEOOOOWCH!!!
[Goku] “Don’t make me laugh, Gojyo~~ My stomach hurts.” – Ahahah! Ow… stop making me laugh Gojyo. My stomach hurts.
[Hakkai] “…Oh, but the fact that the four of us are here on some mountain in the middle of the night, lying around bloodied and bruised in the first place is just so, so funny…” – Well, you have to admit…. Finding four grown men lying at the bottom of some mountain in the dead of the night all covered in blue & black (*snort 3*) is a rather funny sight…
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[Sanzo] “—Cut it out, Hakkai.”
*laughing* “Ow, ow, ow….” - Giggle
Page 20
[Gojyo] “…I just wanna fall asleep right now.” – I wanna go to sleep like this…
[Goku] “Same here, on your right~~” – Same here on the right
[Hakkai] “You mustn’t. One of us will definitely be dead when we wake up in the morning.” – That won’t do at all… a person is sure to be dead when we wake up in the morning.
[Sanzo] “The dead guy’s the loser.” – First one to die loses then
[Gojyo] “….You know, you’re most likely gonna be that guy, Sanzo.” – If we’re talking’ a ‘person’ here, then there’s only one guy who fits that bill, eh, Sanzo?
[Hakkai] “We should at least go down to where there’s shelter. Jeep’s standing by near here.” – In any case, we should make our way down from here and try to locate the villagers. I’ve already asked Jippu to wait for us nearby…
[Goku] “Can you even move, Sanzo?” – But can Sanzo move?
[Sanzo] “…What do you think?” - What do you think, pinhead?”
Page 21
[Gojyo] “~~Don’t talk so high and mighty, Sanzo-sama.” – Heh! For someone who’s incapacitated, you sure talk big, great reverend!!
[Hakkai] “Well I suppose it can’t be helped. Shall we do rock-paper-scissors between the three of us?” – Guess it can’t be helped then…. Shall we decide with ‘Rock-Paper-Scissors’, gentlemen?
[Goku] “What for?” -
[Gojyo] “So the loser has to haul the baggage* to Jeep.” – The loser will be in charge of carrying our dear leader to where Jippu is.
[Sanzo] “~~You bastards…” – why you…!!
[Hakkai] “Okay, first we go with rock, janken—**“ – All right, let’s do it! Rock! Paper! Scissors….
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[* The kanji here is for “Sanzo” but the reading of it is “baggage.”]
[** “Janken” is the word for the rock-paper-scissors game. The game starts with everyone throwing in rock, then proceeds on “janken-poi” (or hoi/pon). If there’s no winner, then you go into a multiple round with “aiko desho” (“a tie!”) until someone wins.]
Page 22
“Hoi.” – GO!
[Goku] “….Oh, Sanzo?” – Sanzo?
[Gojyo] “Why’s the ‘baggage’ playing too?” – Hey, excess baggage need not play, ya know!
[Sanzo] “Who’d wanna be hauled around by you bastards?” – Like I’d let you finger-happy hippes dictate my fate without a fught!
[Hakkai] “As you wish. Aiko de—“ – As you wish then… Let’s take it from the top….
Page 23
“Sho.” – Go!
[Hakkai] “Aiko desho! Sho! Sho!” – One more time… Go! Go!
[Goku?] “—Whoa, Hakkai, you’re going too fast!” – Hakkai, you showed your hand yoo fast!! *snort 4*
[Gojyo?] “GAH~~~! My arm can’t take it anymore…!!” – Guh!!! My arm’s cramping up!!!
[Sanzo?] “…This isn’t janken or anything at this point.” – I don’t think we’re playing Rock! Paper! Scissors anymore…..
[Hakkai] “Yes, the loser will be the one who drops out.” – All right, first one to give up loses then.
[?] “SHIT!!” – DAMMIT!!!
[?] “I’m not gonna lose!!” – I won’t lose!
Page 24
[Ukoku] *chuckling at first* “Ahahahahahahahaha!!!”
Page 25
[Ukoku] *sighs* “…Hey, Koumyou…I got something really nice from your child.” – Guess what, Koumyou… I got something really nice from that kid of yours….
Not even moonlight can reach it. This is— - Something that even the moonlight cannot reach…. And that its…..
Page 26
True darkness.
Page 27
[man] “Ooh, you’re looking much better today.” – Oh… I see you’re looking much better today…
Page 28
[man] “When I found you all bloodied and near death, I’d wondered what kind of awful youkai had fallen out of the sky… Here you go.” – When I found you collapsed on the ground, you were all covered in blood… I thought some scary demon had fallen from the sky… Here, drink this.
[Hazel] “…Thank you.” – My thanks..
[man] “You’re certainly not from around here. – Can you still not remember anything?” – You must be a foreigner, yeah? Still can’t remember anything about yourself?
[Hazel] “……..”
[man] “Don’t push yourself. –Oh, that’s right…” – Well, no need to force it, y’hear? Oh, that reminds me!
Page 29
[man] “Here. Even while you were unconscious, you wouldn’t let that go. It must’ve been very important to….” – Here. You were clutching on to this when you passed out… must be something that’s very important to you…
Page 30
[man] “~~Hey, hey, what’s the matter? Are your wounds hurting?” - H-Hey… is something wrong? Are your wounds hurting?
[Jiroushin] “….My goodness. Watching them on their journey cannot be good for the heart.” – Dear me… seems this journey is really taking its toll on our travellers’ spirits…
[Kanzeon] “—That’s why it’s entertaining.” – That’s what makes things interesting, you know…
Page 31
[youkai] “Hahahah! We’ve got you now! You’re the wanted men of the Sanzo Ikkou, aren’t you!!?” – Wahaha!! Found ya at last! You four must be Sanzo & Company , eh?!
[Jiroushin] “But Goddess, while the Sanzo Ikkou had started out the on the journey plowing ahead fearing nothing, they seem to have had some hard-fought battles of late.” – But… when Sanzo & company first set off on this journey, they were able to press on regardless because there was nothing that they feared… of late, however, they seem to be struggling under the weight of their battles….
Page 32
[Kanzeon] “—If you keep shooting, you’ll eventually run out of bullets. Up until this point, they only knew how to recklessly fire at random. But now, they’ve reloaded their ammo anew, that’s all.” - Firing at random will only deplete their bullets in a matter of time….. Those guys used to be just reckless daredevils who’d shoot haphazardly without understanding ….but now they fight with the bullet that’s encased within their hearts….
Page 33
[Kanzeon] “With surefire bullets called ‘reality.’ – the bullet that is more dependable… that (*snort 5* I think they meant than) anything else, called REALITY.
“….now, you’re done reloading.” – Now that you’ve reloaded…
Page 34
[Kanzeon] “All that’s left is to fire at will. – it’s time to strike back….
“--Isn’t that right?” – isn’t it??
Page 35
You bastards ready for this? – Ready or not, Punk?!
Page 36
*creaking*
*SLAM*
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